Thanks Joe. I will rethink the ceding of the contract. I thought it worked, but I could be wrong, so that could affect the "although" lines.
I am definitely thinking of rebuilding the fourth wall. And pondering the last line. I hope to come back with another version shortly.
Hi Nemo. I like your idea about the last line, and also the need for a Clare epigraph. I'll have to give some thought to that. And I'm glad you (generally) like it.
Glad you like it too, Jim. I am going back and forward about that metaphor. For me it runs out of steam after eight lines. Or I do.
Thanks for popping in, John. I'm glad you think I'm in there all right.
Ah Phil, thanks. You're a great walker yourself, I know. I hadn't even thought about the workshop experiences aspect, so I'll do that now.
Cheers all
David
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