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Unread 05-02-2012, 11:01 AM
Sharon Fish Mooney Sharon Fish Mooney is offline
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Thinks this would flow better and be stronger with some rearrangement of stanza breaks -- two stanzas with 7 lines each OR one continuous poem

And delete "who turned to a natural diet to fight his stomach cancer" from the epigraph as the poem tells us this
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