Tim,
My books are in storage, and I have been able to find all but "There are roughly zones" from the net and am enjoying working through them.
I did not see the discussion over at Mastery, however:
"A goose in the yard yearns for a barn,
and the penned bird, to go free.
(Now this, I would have written as:
the bird in the pen to go free)
The returning salmon yearns for the tarn
(and this as:
The salmon who returns yearns for the tarn)
from which its fry will flee.
(and this as:
as its fry will yearn for the sea)
Is this the right track?
Regards,
Jax
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