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Unread 04-29-2012, 04:16 PM
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I'm positively steeling myself against that 'This is my favourite one so far' feeling that several people have mentioned, regarding all of the sonnets!

I've decided to adopt this approach (which I haven't done before): Every day I'm putting the poems into a Word file, where I can read them over and over when they're all there.

Oh boy! Then the hard part will come in!

In this one, I'm not too keen on the metaphor 'that people are the fingers of God', but like the poem overall. I'm also unsure about the last line:

Tonight it whispers "Shush", it whispers "Child."

Is the ocean whispering, "Shush, child" or "Shush" and then "Child"? The latter doesn't make a lot of sense, so why separate the two words - apart from for the purpose of fitting the rhyme and meter? That's my main concern.

Jayne
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