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Unread 10-07-2014, 04:28 PM
Julie Steiner Julie Steiner is offline
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Default VOTE! The Bake-Off poll closes 14 Oct.!

The ballots you post below will decide THREE prizewinners from the main Translation Bake-Off event finalists, ONE prizewinner for translation of Meleager's bee poem, and ONE prizewinner for translation of Meleager's first mosquito poem.

The authors of those five prizewinning entries will receive either a copy of the Able Muse Translation Anthology Special Issue...or, if they already own this, their choice of a book from the Able Muse Press catalog.

The quality of the Meleager translations was so good that I'd like to see more than one bee and one mosquito recognized for excellence. So I'll announce who the top three vote-getters were for those, too. (The second- and third-place winners for the Meleager translations will have to be content with receiving undying glory, though--no tangible prize.)

If you don't yet have time to evaluate the entries for all three contests, you can vote a partial ballot now, and edit in the rest of your picks anytime before 14 October. I won't tally the votes until then. (And if you never get around to to finishing, the parts you did vote will still count.)

2014 TRANSLATION BAKE-OFF MAIN EVENT FINALISTS:

1A--Ariosto's fly
1B--Neruda's insect
1C--Boye's butterflies
1D--Rimbaud's lice
1E--Anonymous bookworm
1F--Kosztolányi's 3 insects
1G--Leal's butterflies
1H--Gautier's cricket

MELEAGER'S BEE POEM CHALLENGE ENTRIES:
(Compare these to the original and prose crib here.)

Post #4 by Maryann Corbett
Post #7 by Mary McLean
Post #8 by Susan McLean
Post #13 (scroll down to entry) by Birthe Myers
Post #14 by Roger Slater (Bob Schechter)
Post #19 by Ann Drysdale
Post #20 by Susan McLean
Post #21 by RCL (Ralph Larosa)
Post #22 by John Whitworth
Post #23 by Ann Drysdale
Post #24 by Sharon Fish Mooney

MELEAGER'S FIRST MOSQUITO POEM CHALLENGE ENTRIES:
(Compare these to the original and prose crib here.)

Post #3 by Ann Drysdale
Post #6 by Mary McLean
Post #7 by RCL (Ralph Larosa)
Post #8 by Brian Allgar
Post #9 by Sharon Fish Mooney
Post #10 by Susan McLean
Post #11 by Ann Drysdale

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For your convenience, you may cut and paste (and fill in!) the following ballot.

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MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS AMONG THE 2014 BAKE-OFF FINALISTS:

#1 (3 points):
#2 (2 points):
#3 (1 point):

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S BEE POEM:

#1 (3 points):
#2 (2 points):
#3 (1 point):

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S FIRST MOSQUITO POEM:

#1 (3 points):
#2 (2 points):
#3 (1 point):

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Unread 10-08-2014, 05:50 AM
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MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS AMONG THE 2014 BAKE-OFF FINALISTS:

#1 (3 points): Ariosto's Fly
#2 (2 points): Boye's Butterflies
#3 (1 point): --------

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S BEE POEM:

#1 (3 points): #19 Ann Drysdale
#2 (2 points): #7 Mary McLean
#3 (1 point): #22 John Whitworth

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S FIRST MOSQUITO POEM:

#1 (3 points): #3 Ann Drysdale
#2 (2 points): #8 Brian Allgar
#3 (1 point): #7 Ralph Larosa (RCL)

Thank you, Julie, for an interesting bake-off and for your detailed and learned comments and suggestions.
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Unread 10-08-2014, 07:34 AM
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main event points:

first place 1E--Anonymous bookworm
second place 1G--Leal's butterflies
(don't really have a third place yet...)
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Unread 10-08-2014, 08:10 AM
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Thanks for everything, Julie, and ESPECIALLY for making it so extremely easy to refer to the poems while deciding, and for making voting so very convenient and clear.


MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS AMONG THE 2014 BAKE-OFF FINALISTS:

#1 (3 points): Ariosto's fly
#2 (2 points): Rimbaud's lice
#3 (1 point): (don't have one yet)

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S BEE POEM:

#1 (3 points): Ann Drysdale, post 19
#2 (2 points): Ralph LaRosa, post 21
#3 (1 point): Mary McLean, post 7

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S FIRST MOSQUITO POEM:

#1 (3 points): Ann Drysdale, post 3
#2 (2 points): Brian Allgar, post 8
#3 (1 point): (don't have a third choice)
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MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS AMONG THE 2014 BAKE-OFF FINALISTS:

#1 (3 points): 1C - Boye's Butterfly
#2 (2 points): 1B - Anonymous Bookworm
#3 (1 point):
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Bake-Off Finalists:

1. Ariosto's Fly
2. Anonymous Bookworm
3. Neruda's Insect

Meleager's Bee

1. Mary McLean
2. Ann Drysdale post #19
3. Roger Slater

Meleager's Mosquito

1. Ann Drysdale, post #3
2. Mary McLean
3. Brian Allgar

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Unread 10-08-2014, 02:22 PM
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I don't feel like I'm at all qualified to make any pronouncements on the goodness or badness of translations - but I really wanted to say that Ann's mosquito poem is a delight. (The first one. I see she had two.) So if I can vote for just one thing:

MELEAGER'S FIRST MOSQUITO POEM CHALLENGE ENTRIES:

Post #3 by Ann Drysdale
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Unread 10-09-2014, 08:17 AM
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MAIN EVENT

1. Ariosto’s fly


How agreeable to find a fully-rhymed, fully-metrical piece. It flows, it convinces, and I think ‘adamant/integument’ is very good (although I suppose that, technically, it is a partial rhyme). Did someone say that his dictionary claims that ‘adamant’ is archaic? I am adamant that it is not.

2. Neruda’s insect

Well, it’s free verse, but it has a certain charm and oddity that I found pleasing.

3. Anonymous bookworm

Having been compelled to study Anglo-Saxon at university, I tend to look on it askance (except for ‘The Seafarer'), but this is a nifty little piece, and I like the sly ending. What’s more, it’s a lot shorter than 'Beowulf'.

MELEAGER'S BEE

This was a difficult choice, as there were several that I liked. In the end, I picked the two that most amused me, and one that was very neatly turned ... but there were others that I might well have chosen using different criteria.

1. Ann Drysdale (post 23)
I’m in a minority of one here - everyone else so far prefers Ann’s first poem. But although I’m not keen on the last line - “to nix” is a bit of a sore thumb - I couldn’t resist the image of the bee waving his bum in the flowers’ faces, and I liked the fact that Ann had used a rhyme for “Heliodora” other than “flora”.

2. John Whitworth

A neat encapsulation. I very much liked “abseils up a buttercup”, and the gently mocking tone of the last two lines.

3. Mary McLean
Nicely compressed into a mere 6 lines, and fully-rhymed.

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Unread 10-09-2014, 08:28 AM
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MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS AMONG THE 2014 BAKE-OFF FINALISTS:

#1 (3 points): Ariosto's Fly
#2 (2 points): Bookworm
#3 (1 point): 3 insects

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S BEE POEM:

#1 (3 points): John W
#2 (2 points): Ann D #19
#3 (1 point): Susan M #8

MY FAVORITE TRANSLATIONS OF MELEAGER'S FIRST MOSQUITO POEM:

#1 (3 points): Ann D #3
#2 (2 points): Brian A
#3 (1 point): Susan M
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Unread 10-09-2014, 01:27 PM
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A wonderful event, Julie. Thank you for putting so much expertise and care into it.

For the Bake-Off

#1 (3 points): 1B -Anonymous Bookworm
#2 (2 points): 1F--Kosztolányi's 3 insects
#3 (1 point): 1C - Boye's Butterfly

For the Bee
#1 (3 points): Post #20 by Susan McLean
#2 (2 points): Post #14 by Roger Slater (Bob Schechter)
Can’t decide on a third

For the Mosquito
#1 (3 points): #3 Ann Drysdale
#2 (2 points): #8 by Brian Allgar
I can’t decide on a 3rd
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