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Old 08-21-2017, 07:33 PM
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At last, a rhyme for orange!

Carhenge!

Anyone want to try to write the most absurd couplet? I could offer a free copy of Shot Silk for that winner...
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Old 08-21-2017, 07:37 PM
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There was an old fellow from Carhenge
Whose favorite fruit was the orange.
But, funny old geezer,
Instead of a squeezer,
He'd just put the fruit in a doorhinge.

Cheers,
John
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Old 08-21-2017, 07:54 PM
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Nice kickoff, John. Only problem, it's not a couplet.

This may be more difficult than I thought (ie absurdism). I will check back later!
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Old 08-21-2017, 08:02 PM
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Yes, that was my free jazz take on the couplet form. I say it extremely fast.
Porridge also kind of rhymes with orange.
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Old 08-21-2017, 08:19 PM
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We learned something unexpected on campus today: during an eclipse, the shadows of leaves on the ground all look like little moons pointing the same way. It's quite weird. A bit late, but I thought worth noting.
Yes, I saw them on the park path today, under the trees. A partial eclipse here, so the images like crescent moons, but they are images of the sun, with the shadow of the moon taking a bite out. See here.

My neighbor had a pinhole camera he made out of a shoe box & we could see the image of the eclipse in that (in addition to using medically approved dark glasses).

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Old 08-22-2017, 01:56 AM
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There are other ways to look at eclipses. This was the UK in 1999.

The Shadow of the Moon

“Oh, what the hell” we said, and did the thing
Without protection. Risky undertaking.
With our bare eyes we watched the sun’s eclipse
Reflected in the surface of the pond.

Wet-blanket clouds had shackled its full power;
It lay in the water, Achilles’ shield,
Dull, sunken silver. Then a dozen orfe –
Pond-swallows – gurgitated centre-stage
Chasing a drift of midges, shattering
The picture beyond mere representation –
Matisse – Cézanne – and all the broken light
Shimmered into a glorious, soundless noise.

I turned to you to share the glee, and saw
The first shadow of pain crossing your face.
You hid it well. No sooner there than gone.

The cloud lifted. The sun was back again.
The orfe retreated into the dark place
Under the lilies. Something had ended.
Something had begun.
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Old 08-22-2017, 04:04 AM
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Lovely. I especially like this -

I turned to you to share the glee, and saw
The first shadow of pain crossing your face.


Also, the word orfe, new to me.

Cheers,
John
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Old 08-22-2017, 04:32 PM
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Before I forget, let me say that Aaron's translation is one good slab of translation.
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Old 08-23-2017, 11:50 AM
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Yes, I have seen many lunate leaf-shadows today.
But were you being 'followed by a moon-shadow, moon-shadow, moon-shadow'?
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Old 08-23-2017, 12:04 PM
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There was an old fellow from Carhenge
Whose favorite fruit was the orange.
But, funny old geezer,
Instead of a squeezer,
He'd just put the fruit in a doorhinge.

Cheers,
John
Ha Ha, that made me laugh. It was especially the use of the doorhinge.
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