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Unread 04-02-2003, 10:35 PM
rizenmoon rizenmoon is offline
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Absolution

As virtues go, forgiveness is the jewel.
No other action stays the arching bow.
The history of treachery is cruel,
And bountiful by hand of friend and foe.
Forgiving men their trespass is more task
Than basking in forgivness offerred forth.
The energy to shed the wrathful mask,
Ignites the light to true direction North.
The grace of God seems often wide of mark,
Too late to armor hope before blood flows.
Forgiving God when night is dire and dark
High water marks the mind that knows it knows.
The fitful sad and pointless sleep of Seems
Awakens, through foregiveness, into dreams.
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Unread 04-03-2003, 06:31 AM
Tim Murphy Tim Murphy is offline
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This strikes as awfully strained. Suggest you repost it at Metrical I and get some help.
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