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Unread 05-28-2017, 12:54 PM
Aaron Poochigian Aaron Poochigian is offline
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my poem "Divertimento," which I workshopped here, is out in the new issue of "Rattle." Here it is:

Divertimento

There had been no attraction, no surprise
for fifty miles, just crows, Holsteins and stubble,
and now, atop the only local rise,
like an ungatherable

iron flower, this looky-here wind turbine.
Sure, it turns a hair-harassing day
to zaps that, routed eastward, power urban
transit, say,

or crab canneries further up the coast,
but in this yawner of a Bronze Age Now,
among the ruminants, what matters most
is just, like, freaking wow—

Bravissimo for the kinetic sculpture
dangling upward from a snag of earth
while juggling, with acquiescent rapture,
three arms’ worth

of gale-force wind. Oh yeah, I wanna be
that gleam with crazy feelers going round.
Thank you, Ohio, for reminding me
how Art should astound.
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Good poem, Aaron.

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I, too, like it. Congrats, Aaron.
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I look forward to reading it when mine comes in.

Congrats.
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I love the poem, especially how it switches registers from utterly colloquial to a tone of quiet wonderment. Congrats, Aaron!

Nausheen
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Very impressed!
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Congratulations! A good one and a great title.
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