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04-29-2017, 06:30 PM
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Congrats, Andrew! I like the aligned-right format.
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04-29-2017, 06:44 PM
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Hello, Andrew, I love the title "Snake Lips." That Hector simile is crazy but works--it works. Crazy.
Congrats,
Aaron
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04-29-2017, 06:52 PM
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Congrats, Andrew! I like the aligned-right format.
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Glad it works. Not actually how it should appear in print though. I assume it might be a website issue, especially since I saw a proof. That said, I don't think it doesn't work as the site has it.
I attached a screen shot of how it (I assume) will appear in print--though I can't get it to be large, it's a little more ragged.
Also, Aaron, thanks for the commendation. Glad you feel the Hector allusion works. Coming from a classicist, it means a lot.
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04-29-2017, 06:59 PM
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Originally Posted by Andrew Szilvasy
Glad it works. Not actually how it should appear in print though. I assume it might be a website issue, especially since I saw a proof. That said, I don't think it doesn't work as the site has it.
I attached a screen shot of how it (I assume) will appear in print--though I can't get it to be large, it's a little more ragged.
Also, Aaron, thanks for the commendation. Glad you feel the Hector allusion works. Coming from a classicist, it means a lot.
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Ah, well that looks even better.
See, this is one of the reasons I'm leary of sending my fuzzy little baby chickens out: It seems, going by your post, and Claudia's thread in GD, that this kind of thing is not all that unusual?
It must be frustrating as hell.
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04-29-2017, 08:20 PM
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Congrats, Andrew
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04-29-2017, 08:30 PM
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Andrew,
I read the poem again, and I can't help asking:
Have you been reading the astoundingly good Marianne Moore? If not, you may be channeling her. Yeah, I know that's woo-ville, but hey, you never know. The only Moore-ian aspect missing in your poem is the ubiquitous quoting " " from other sources, which she did too much, if I can say that without pissing off her ghost.
Sorry Marianne!
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04-29-2017, 08:42 PM
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Have you been reading the astoundingly good Marianne Moore?
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Ha! Of course caught this, Bill. The syllabics (this one and the still relatively fresh on the non-met board) are influenced by my recent(-ish at this point in time) reading of Moore (and the fresh bio). Lots of my recent work has probably merged her and Hardy in some unholy way.
I had read her work reading her when I sent I finished this poem last August, so it's quite likely she hovers over it.
I think the world of early to mid-career Moore. Her "Critics and Connoisseurs" is, I think, one of the best poems of the 20th century.
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04-29-2017, 09:18 PM
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Lots of my recent work has probably merged her and Hardy in some unholy way.
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The Convergence of the Twain? Couldn't resist. Great poem, that.
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Originally Posted by Andrew Szilvasy
I think the world of early to mid-career Moore. Her "Critics and Connoisseurs" is, I think, one of the best poems of the 20th century.
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Seconded.
The book you read is the one I have, except I was lucky enough to find it in hardcover, in perfect, obviously untouched (unloved) condition, for pocket change at a thrift store. Those places are sometimes treasure troves. I think many people buy books by poets just to make a consummate library, but never crack them open.
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Reason: buy instead of by.
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04-30-2017, 06:46 AM
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Very nice poem, Andrew. Congrats!
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