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03-24-2005, 01:31 PM
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Anne Stevenson's sonnet discussion
I wrote the sonnet a few years ago and when Rus Bowden, an old friend, told me about the discussion I fired it off just in case.
Janet
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03-24-2005, 01:40 PM
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Woo HOOOO!! I was going to send something there but have been too busy... well done! Technically perfect, natch. Congrats!
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03-24-2005, 01:47 PM
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Katy,
Thank you 
I guess she knows I did that prattle/startle thing deliberately. I wrote this a few years ago. I LOVE her poetry so I'm a little light headed at the moment.
I can't make West Chester so this is my consolation prize.
Janet
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03-24-2005, 01:49 PM
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Janet:
What a frightening sonnet! It reminded me of being little and watching my father swim across the lake (he's 68 and still does it). I thought "startle" was the exact word to end on.
Stephen
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03-24-2005, 02:57 PM
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Stephen,
Thank you. It seemed right to me at the time of writing it. I guess she's using the sonnets as teaching boards. I often find that it is the nubs in the cloth that give poems character. Her own poems are full of such engaging moments.
Thanks again,
Janet
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03-24-2005, 07:09 PM
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Bravo, Janet!
And there's another connection: my wife, Annie, took that photo of Anne Stevenson used in the article. It was over breakfast one morning at their house in Durham.
Dave
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03-24-2005, 08:00 PM
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Dave,
Thank you. That's amazing! She has a lovely quirky face and it's a great relaxed portrait.
Best,
Janet
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03-25-2005, 04:24 AM
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Well done Janet! Congrats!
On my reading I thought replacing "some" in L8 with "a" would be better for the tone. Can't resist a crit 
I'm unsure about the prattle/startle rhyme. I know what you were trying to do, I'm just not sure if it startles enough. But it certainly doesn't seem like a technical mistake.
--Robert Crawford
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03-25-2005, 05:06 AM
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Robert,
Thank you. The "startle" is obviously a matter of taste. It's not something I would ordinarily have done. I sought the effect. I'll look at the some/at. Poems are never finished.
Appreciated,
Janet
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03-25-2005, 05:55 AM
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Janet Kenny -
Congratulations - I thought the sonnet interesting both technically and in the way the theme was handled. It is difficult to write a piece in which technique does not obscure theme but is yet present enough as to be noticed and appreciated. I think you have succeeded in this one.
Best regards
David Halitsky
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