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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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posted April 17, 2008 02:39 PM

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How to Write a Sestina
By eHow Education Editor http://www.ehow.com/how_16712_write-sestina.html

A traditional poetic form created by Arnaut Daniel, the sestina is made up of six six-line stanzas and a final three-line envoi. Written in iambic pentameter, the sestina is unique in that the poet is required to end each line using a set pattern of the same six words.

Instructions

Things You’ll Need:
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Step 1:

Consider the subject matter that you wish to write about. Think about words related to your subject that you could use several times throughout your poem.

Step 2:
Write your first stanza (and those that follow) using iambic pentameter. The words that end each line in this stanza (identified as 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6) will determine the words that end every stanza in your sestina.

Step 3:
Add a second stanza using those words in a 6, 1, 5, 2, 4, 3 order. If you do this correctly, the word used to end the first line of this stanza should be the same one you used in the sixth line of the previous stanza. The second should match the first, and so on.

Step 4:
Write a third stanza using a 3, 6, 4, 1, 2, 5 pattern, followed by a fourth stanza with a 5, 3, 2, 6, 1, 4 pattern. Stanza five should use a 4, 5, 1, 3, 6, 2 pattern, and stanza six should employ a 2, 4, 6, 5, 3, 1 pattern.

Step 5:
Draft a seventh stanza that is three lines in length, using all six ending words in the following places. Your ending words used in the second, fourth and sixth lines must be used halfway through the lines of this stanza. The fifth, third and first ending words of the first stanza are used to end the lines of this stanza, in that order.

Step 6:
Revise as needed.




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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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My First Sestina
(I tried one another time and broke the rules because I'd failed to read them properly)

I would love to see others posted here for the exercise.
_______________________________________

Two people stood atop a distant hill.
I saw them as I left today from work,
as soon as I had shut the wooden gate
behind me and had chugged a drink of water.
There was no place I really had to go,
and so I took my time. I didn’t run

the way I sometimes do – I often run
as if life were a race. But on that hill
the silhouetted couple stood. I go
and come the same way every day from work,
taking for granted things like sun and water.
Familiar things get lost. Sometimes a gate

will make me pause and think; a creaking gate
especially so, and sounds of things that run,
like trickling brooks. There is a voice in water
that’s like an echo coming off a hill
where heavy clouds laid down their burdensome work,
and, like me, found their peace in letting go

of weight that binds. The moments come and go
as fast as rabbits rushing toward a gate
in search of freedom. There is always work
enough to keep us feeling on-the-run.
The move toward pleasure always seems up hill,
against the laws that govern running water.

And nothing is alive where there’s no water
that's troubled – living things must come and go.
Stagnation lies beneath a quiet hill
of graves, behind the locking of a gate
in wrought iron stillness. Living things must run.
An idle body has no line of work

to keep its spirit going. Life needs work –
and workers need a living well of water
to keep the heart from fainting as they run.
Recycling seems the only way to go.
Yes life’s a circle, and each of us a gate
that God has set upon his lovely hill.

I bike to work near waterfalls that run.
so brisk and full of life, go through the gate
and drink the sun-rise lilting on the hill.


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Michael Cantor

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posted April 17, 2008 04:16 PM

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Here's my absolute favorite part.

quote:
Originally posted by Anne Bryant-Hamon:

Things You’ll Need:
Dictionaries
Thesauri


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Roger Slater

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posted April 17, 2008 04:28 PM

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Things You'll Need:
Dictionaries
Thesauri,
Trail Mix,
Thermal Underwear,
Nose Plugs.


*

(Anyone care to write the next six lines of the sestina?)

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Laura Heidy-Halberstein

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posted April 17, 2008 04:48 PM

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Someone (Lewis Turco, perhaps?) correct me if I'm wrong, but aren't Sestina's traditionally syllabic as opposed to iambic pentameter? I mean, jeez, they're hard enough to write as it is without demanding that they also be strictly metered.

Lo


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Laura Heidy-Halberstein

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posted April 17, 2008 04:52 PM

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Here ya go, Anne, just to prove I can be a good sport when the mood overtakes me.

February, 1974


Sometimes there's nothing left to do but pack
your bags and leave. To stick around would be to court
disasterous results. Brown drugs in foil
packages lay scattered 'cross the floor. Go
elsewhere quickly now - don't wait. It's all your fault.
The stage was set by someone else whose cue


you should have recognized. This is your cue -
the baby's cry, the watching dogs that pack
around his crib, protectively, like it's your fault
their life is such a mess. He goes to court
today, he won't be home. It's time to go -
to grab the kid, the dogs, your clothes, and foil


his attempts to keep you locked inside. So, do it. Foil
him - don't lose your courage now. The broken pool cue
in the bedroom says it all. This man can kill. Go
far away and change your name. Don't bother packing
anything, just leave it all behind. The court
won't keep him jailed up tight for long. It's not their fault,


the case is weak. If anyone's at fault
it might be you. You've been the perfect foil
far too long. So scared, so meek and mild. You're courting
death if you don't leave. Take one more cue
from life before you die that needlessly. Just pack
your baby and your dogs and run away. Go -


Hurry - steal his keys and take his car. Go
find a place that's safe before you die. The fault's
your own. You should have left six months ago. Pack
the diaper bag with toys and doggie bones. The foil
packages and burnt spoons stay behind. The pool cue
in the corner that once kissed your empty head stays in his court.


You've got to move more quickly now. Don't court
disaster's clock. Grab your sanity and go.
You're very young, I know, and that's your cue.
You've got a life to live. It's his own fault
if someday he should overdose and foil
his last chance at staying clean. You pack.


You go. Take your child and your dogs. They'll take their cue
from you so please don't cry. Leave the foil to be dealt with by the court.
Pack this conviction with the bottles and the bones. It's not your fault.

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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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posted April 17, 2008 05:36 PM

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Fascinating, Laura. It's unclear to me whether this is something you wrote in '74 or just now wrote. Either way, I do hope you had fun writing it.

I thought sestinas were supposed to be in IP - but I'm no expert.

If others want to do this exercise but would like to avoid the fretful, frightful, fraying fringes, feel free to send me yours in PM.

Anne


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Laura Heidy-Halberstein

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posted April 18, 2008 06:27 AM

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quote:
Originally posted by Anne Bryant-Hamon:
. I do hope you had fun writing it.


Anne


Actually, it wasn't fun at all.

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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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posted April 18, 2008 07:10 AM

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quote:

Actually, it wasn't fun at all.

Lo



Some people love writing sestinas. One particular poet comes to mind. I think they're a bit unnatural. But I wanted to try it. So that's why I started this thread. I usually don't have 39 lines to say about anything in a poem. It was always a stretch for me to write longer forms like that ballade and Chant Royal. For sure I will never write a novel :-)

Take care -
Anne


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Hi Anne,
This seemed like a fun drill so I thought I'd join in. It isn't my first sestina, but I think it's one of the only ones I didn't write while drunk in a bar or at a party. Thanks for posting this. Hope you had as much fun as I did.

I thought when you were gone my peace was made,
But now your empty pillow mocks my joy.
I picture you asleep, an earthly angel,
Who only lacks the wings to bring him home.
I would be willing to forgive all wrongs,
If only I could trust you to be kind.

The other day you smiled, you were so kind
I thought that with you back, our peace was made,
But then you blew me off, revived dead wrongs,
And resurrected sorrow to kill joy.
So now, though I am drawn, I can’t go home
To him who one time seemed to be an angel.

Perhaps, although unkind, you are an angel,
But I’d prefer a man, if he were kind.
For years you reassured me you’d come home,
But still you strayed. And what home can be made
Out of an empty house, built without joy
And with a cornerstone made up of wrongs?

Let us forgive the past, forget all wrongs.
Let us be true. I’ll guard you like an angel
Guards sleeping children, and fills their dreams with joy
So they may dream of peace. Let us be kind
And let us claim a future newly made
To stand forever as an earthly home.

But still you stay away. Forget the home,
Forget the dreams we had. Remember wrongs.
Remember in the solitude you made
That love is difficult. I’m not an angel
And I can’t save you, though I would be kind.
So let us stay alone and forget joy.

Why does your voice still fill me with such joy?
Why, when I hear it, do I feel at home?
Leave me alone, if you wish to be kind.
‘Cos running hot and cold adds to the wrongs.
But still, though you are cruel, you are my angel
And so I’ll say to you whose absence made

All of the joy we felt transform to wrongs.
But if I could go home and find my angel
Pretending to be kind, my peace were made.


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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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posted April 18, 2008 06:25 PM

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Hi Barb -

Thanks for joining in. This one is filled with angst. Such sorrow often 'feels uncommon', but is common to us all.

My greatest peace came when I finally understood that no one could be a 'husband' to me except for Christ. I think I used to believe that one man could be "like God" and keep me company. No one can do that... because God has been diced up into bits and scattered over the earth! I hope you don't mind the personal commentary on the content of your poem.

I'm like Solomon who had many wives (except I have many husbands, i.e. people who are precious to me). I think my husband is a certain part buried inside of every man (person). Admittedly, sometimes that precious pearl is so covered with mud that I cannot find it! Gosh, I bet I sound like a werido! Oh well. Just felt like telling you these things.

I don't think I like the sestina as a poetry form all that much. I've never read one that I thought was an awesome piece of poetry. Perhaps there's one hidden somewhere that I just haven't laid my eyes on yet. But I have my doubts To have 6 repeated words spread over 6 stanzas often comes off as sounding rather monotonous (IMO). This comment is toward sestinas in general, not yours specifically.

Grace and peace to you -
Anne


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We talked about sestinas with Rhina on Mastery a good while ago. I posted this. Lo, I don't see why it's harder to use meter in a sestina than anywhere else.
This is written about women who were left without men because of wars. I knew many in my childhood. They became feminists and had careers and fun.
And nearly all sestinas are dull. I remember we found some which were anything but. This isn't anything special just an attempt to write one of the jolly things.

To Maiden Aunts


Too glib, to condescend to maiden aunts
who saw the world at war, as all at once
their world went mad and robbed them of their chance
to live their lives. No whisper or response
to make them feel like flowers. No romance
to sing their hearts into a fervent dance.

And if fate toyed with them, and at some dance
they met a boy who charmed them, maiden aunts
were far too frightened to believe romance
could promise them a future. Never once
did they entrust their youthful heart’s response
to love. It was too great a loss to chance.

They saw life as a brutal game of chance
where happiness was like a firefly’s dance,
elusive and capricious. Their response
was frozen. Thus the girls turned into aunts
before their beauty faded. All at once
they turned to books and study for romance.

The scholar aunts were teachers and romance
for them was knowledge. They gave girls the chance
to own their lives. They told them all how once
girls had no freedom, and their eyes would dance
when Eliot (George not Tom) spoke well of aunts
and Woolf (Virginia) wrote their response.

They saw their younger sisters’ vain response--
new furniture, designer clothes--romance
had trapped them in domestic dullness. Aunts
had independence. They each seized the chance
to travel. Correspondence traced their dance
through fabled cities, loving more than once.

They knew where history and drama once
enacted out a passionate response,
and on exotic tombs their spirits danced
to unfamiliar music. A romance
that echoed through the universe. A chance
to travel with the Bodhisattva aunts.

My favourite aunt once said that real romance
was more than a response to casual chance,
but rather freedom’s dance for captive aunts.




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posted April 19, 2008 10:16 AM

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Theft

They left when no guard saw them go
And took with them the Diamond Heart.
This theft we all would later know
As why the Diamond War would start
When death removed the gorgeous glow
From bodies dumped inside the cart.

The bodies dumped inside the cart
Had nowhere else where they could go.
They lost the life that made them glow.
You cannot warm a stiffened heart.
Though no one thought this war would start,
It did, and now that's all we know.

It started, and that's all we know.
I see your head rest in the cart.
They stop, reload, and then they start.
I cannot go where you will go
At least until my weakened heart
Goes stiff and loses all its glow.

It's stiff and lost all of its glow.
The thieves escaped, but they don't know
What happened to the Diamond Heart
When you were placed inside the cart.
This one must stay, but some must go,
And further warfare needs to start.

As further warfare wants to start,
The Diamond Heart will cease to glow,
At least for those who have to go,
Who never more will need to know
The others lying in the cart
Are still just like the Diamond Heart.

They're still just like the Diamond Heart,
But did their beating ever start,
Or were they always in the cart,
And did some ever see them glow?
The thieves confuse all that we know,
Except we also have to go.

It is the heart that makes one glow,
But when we start, we soon will know
Into the cart, we all shall go.


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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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posted April 19, 2008 03:19 PM

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Janet,

I find your poem fascinating as one who has been both delighted and perplexed about the role of being a female in this world. I'm continually intrigued and annoyed by human sexuality. It seems to be at the root of everything both good and bad!

Thanks for posting one! Not bad. :-)
Anne


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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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posted April 19, 2008 03:23 PM

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Frank -

Yours is interesting. The talk of theft and Diamond wars reminded me of Africa and the hellish problems going on there.

I'm wondering whether you and Barbara and Janet randomly chose 6 words and began writing, or if you thought about what you'd like to write about and then chose 6 words? The one I posted here was the result of choosing 6 words and just beginning to write, not knowing where it would take me.

Thanks for the fun :-) It makes me happy when people come out to play poetry games with me.

***Smiles***
Anne


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Dear Anne,

In reply to your earlier post, I agree that no one's love could replace God's, but it's hard to be rational about love sometimes... I can't say I ever expected a guy to be like God, but I did hope he might stick around. Ah well. I like the idea of a pearl covered with mud. Of course, it does rather remind one of the advice not to throw pearls to swine.

In answer to your question, as I wrote each line of the first stanza I thought about whether I could repeat the end word and I tried to choose ones that were easily repeated. 'Made', for that purpose, was probably a mistake.

Barbara


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Anne Bryant-Hamon

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Barbara -

Interesting to know how you approached your sestina. You knew what you wanted to write about and in writing the first stanza chose the words. Perhaps I'd have more luck writing a sestina if I knew what I wanted to write about before-hand. As I said, I picked six words randomly and just dove in with no idea where I'd go...probably not the best approach for writing a sestina or any other form.

My apologies if my personal comments came across as sounding insensitive. They were not meant to be and what I was trying to say probably made little sense.

Should you decide you want to do a very challenging exercise, we could swap end words from the sestinas we've posted here and try to write another using each others six words. If you're not interested, I totally understand. But I think I will collect all of the end words from yours and Janet's and Frank's poem and try to write my own 3 sestinas with them just to make sure I don't like writing in the form. This will take me some time - I can't just spit one out in 30 minutes.

:-)
Anne


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Dear Anne-

No worries. I appreciated your comments a lot actually. And you're on for the exercise of swapping end words. Not sure when I'll get mine up, but should be before Tuesday anyhow.

Ciao,
Barbara


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A poem that sends up the form beautifully is “Bob”:
http://www.pshares.org/issues/article.cfm?prmArticleID=4668

Also see this earlier Erato thread on “The Art of the Sestina”.
http://www.ablemuse.com/erato/ubbhtml/Forum3/HTML/000469.html

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Anne-

As promised:

I watched my lover tumble down the hill
And laughed to catch him, once more, shirking work.
I tumbled after him down to the gate
And walked back up alone to fetch the water.
I turned my head to watch the slacker go
Before I lugged the pail home at a run.

Work’s harder when you do it at a run.
(Or so I found it, though I ran downhill.)
And so I said, “Where does Jack always go?”
And, “Yet again he’s given me more work.
Well, since he’s lazy, he shall have no water.
I told him so when we were at the gate.”

I stood and waited for you at the gate.
You were too beautiful, I had to run
And make you chase me, carrying the water.
I laughed to see your anger on the hill
When, once again, I’d left you all the work.
But if you catch me, Jill, again we’ll go

And tumble down, (I will not let you go)
Over the grass and flowers to the gate
And you can mock me for my fear of work.
While all the world is laughing, we will run
And find a quiet place upon the hill
Where we may watch the sun set on the water.

Perhaps we’ll drink a sip or two of water
Or share the wine I brought before we go
And once more tumble down our secret hill
Until I break my crown upon the gate
And beg, before I faint, that you will run
And fetch the doctor quickly from his work.

I will survive, only to dodge my work.
I’ll ditch you every time you fetch the water.
And in the afternoons I’ll want to run
With you through fields and woods. Perhaps we’ll go
And have our secret meetings by the gate.
I always loved to kiss you on the hill.

Yes, I will flee from work and then I’ll go
And fetching water, find Jack at the gate,
So we may daily run upon our hill.

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posted April 20, 2008 11:32 PM

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quote:
Originally posted by Anne Bryant-Hamon:

I'm wondering whether you and Barbara and Janet randomly chose 6 words and began writing, or if you thought about what you'd like to write about and then chose 6 words?


I started with the first stanza and then, painstakingly, tried to figure out which end-word had to go on which succeeding line. That ordering was the most difficult part of the challenge. I kept getting the permutations wrong. So the chosen words were whatever worked in the first stanza.

I did choose the end-words to be simple rhymes to add some repeated sound to the sestina, which I think it lacks. I also shortened the lines to tetrameter and repeated the 6th line in the 1st of the next stanza. All that is not in the original rule.

To me, the sestina is a mathematical pattern that has no sound (metrical/poetic) value associated with the permutation of the end words. And that makes me question whether the sestina is a true form rather than merely an arbitrary rule.

Meter in a language is more than the description of it, that is, more than the number of syllables, accents, alliterations, rhymes, or repetitions that are detected by those scanning the poem. It is something that is pleasing to the ear of many native listeners, which may turn out to be not easily scanned.

The sestina, however, starts with an arbitrary description rather than a pleasing pattern already in existence in the language. Adding the false assumption that the existence of a description implies the existence of a poetic form, one gets the false conclusion that the sestina is a poetic form. To my ear, the sestina, as a rule, is unlikely to succeed as a form in any language.

The rhymed example by Swinburne that Henry Quince mentioned in the thread he cited I thought was interesting, but even with that example, I don't see why the permutation of the end-words was necessary. The arbitrary rule got in the way even there. Nor do I see the benefit of adding this end-word permutation constraint to anything written in free or blank verse.

Thanks for the challenge, Anne. It was the only sestina I've ever written.


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posted April 20, 2008 11:46 PM

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Nice retelling of the Jack and Jill story, Barbara.



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Originally posted by Frank Hubeny:
Nice retelling of the Jack and Jill story, Barbara.


I agree, the retelling of something familiar to me made it more enjoyable. Way to go Barbara. I will be working on mine this week.

Frank, I tend to agree with your thoughts about the sestina. I think it is "a kind of poem" (if we don't want to include it in formal poetry) that can only rarely succeed as a very good poem that people would want to read again and again. That's how classics are made - you want to read them again and again.

Henry, I glanced at the first link and wondered what all the Bobbing was about. I'll have to check more into this stuff later - it is past my bed-time.

Thanks everybody!

Watch this space this week for my upcoming sestina, but don't set your hopes too high!

Anne


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Thanks Frank and Anne. Jack and Jill were the first things that came to mind when I saw your end words. I don't know what I think about Sestinas either. They're a fun challenge to write, but I don't usually keep them afterwards.

Barbara


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Hello, Barbara -

Sorry this was so long in coming. I had a sinus headache for most of the week, but still had to be at work. I find it difficult to write when I have a headache. Excuses, excuses, everyone has one!

And may I say, I don't much care for the result of this exercise for myself - meaning, I ain't crazy about the sestina I made with these end words, mostly because it sounds redundant (and perhaps corny, though I do believe what I'm saying in it). For time's sake, I'm going to leave the all caps since you don't mind them anyway - and also, I'm pretty sure I made a mistake in my 7th stanza, but am sick to death of the sestina so I am not going to fix it.
And now that the into is over... here she is:

From land and sea a melting pot was made
Of people stirred together of every kind
Of tongue and tribe and race without a home
To call their own. They sailed in search of joy
Or something not delivered by an angel –
For justice from a litany of wrongs.

Each one was dealt a smattering of wrongs
Men measured out on nations that were made
A wasteland. It’s quite rare that there’s an angel
With power on the earth, whose ways are kind
Where righteousness leads people into joy,
That earth might be for all a happy home.

But Jesus said this world was not his home,
His followers would suffer many wrongs.
They’d learn to look inside for lasting joy.
And for our growth this trial of time God made.
Though often God’s plan doesn’t feel so kind.
Yet He has promised each a guardian angel.

Though Jesus did not call upon his angel
To save him when he’d left his heavenly home.
He trusted that his Father’s plan was kind,
And that He would eventually right the wrongs
That come upon us all. For we were made
To bear the earthly image first. What joy

Shall fill us as we drink of heaven’s joy
And join the ecstasy known to the angels.
It was for joy that everything was made.
Our Father plans to bring us safely home,
To wash away all pain and tears and wrongs
We have endured. And we shall be a kind

Of heavenly being. Each seed begets its kind.
In Father’s house there is eternal joy,
For nothing vile can enter – and no wrongs
Shall ever hurt us there. We shall be angels
who sing forever in our heavenly home.
It was for love and joy that we were made.

For joy we have been made lower than angels,
But only in this temporal earthly home.
The wrongs we suffer shall teach us what is kind.



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Sorry you had a headache. I like yours a lot better than mine. Barbara


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posted April 29, 2008 05:29 PM

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quote:
Originally posted by Jan D. Hodge:

......Is woman languid if she’s but midwest lively,
......or midwest man divorced from all things wise
......and beautiful?


Nice lines!


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Dear Exuberant Divorced Worldly Woman,

Jan,

Are you talking to me?! Kidding. Thanks for sharing this. I'm convinced for sure that I don't like writing sestinas. I much prefer letting others write them!

Hope you had a nice vacation. And thank you for sending the lovely poetry cards - they're beautiful, and that was so kind of you.

Okay, whose going to write the next sestina? For my part, I'm leaving that up to my double/twin.

Cheers!
Anne


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Mark Strand solved the "problem" of the sestina by writing his in prose. See his "Chekhov: A Sestina" in The Continuous Life.


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