Too right, Frank. And Jayne, I have made certain adjustments giving me an aaaa set of rhymes which I like mightily.

What a treat to see a master at work! I love this one, John.

Frank's idea is great, John. You could just substitute 'cloak' for 'coat' and keep 'his' in that line, but I'd try to lose one of them in the 'glasses' line.

I'm tickled by the notion that 'bifocals' might be going too far... in a poem about Death knocking on your door and talking to you?!
Don't forget, the Grim Reaper's 'an ancient shag' too, so his eyesight must be failing a bit by now :rolleyes:

My husband fell about laughing when I read this out to him. He regrets even more that he was away on business and didn't get to meet you when you stayed here! You've gotta come back again, John :D

PS I took so long to finish this post (dinner was ready) that you've already posted a revision I haven't looked at yet.

Oh, no John, no John, no....

the 'lips and fingertips' was heaps better than the 'bones' and 'tones'.

(Pete says you can't come back and stay unless you re-instate those former rhymes ;))

Forgive me - I posted a poem here and have since realised that I have offered it elsewhere. The Oldie can't have it unless the editor of the journal I sent it to decides not to take it. Posting it here in those circumstances probably constitutes vanity posting, so I've removed it. Sorry.

He was not where He said He’d be.
I left my card and told His man
That I'd be back. He said to me:
You’ll catch Him only as catch can.

He’s up, He’s down, He’s in-between.
He’s never out and never in.
His Lordship’s face is never seen,
But you can always try again,

Though no one knows where He has gone
These twenty centuries and more.
But, still, we leave the hall-light on.
With that he bowed and shut the door.

He’s here? He’s there? He’s everywhere?
Such curious conduct casts a pall!
Now home, I seek my comfy chair
To wait, unchosen, for His call.

I think Jayne's right, John.

What. Two of you. I shall have to reconsider. Damn.

Keep the lips and tips, John, so Pete will let you visit him and Jayne. The number of "his"s was off my radar.

John, if you know what's good for you you'll take Mary's advice. Pete's cooking is better than most professional chefs', I absolutely promise you. (I can't remember what I gave you to eat but, trust me, you missed out last time!)