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Here I am again, arriving after you and Andrew have done all the hard work (and possibly to say "oh, you've missed a bit").
Like Andrew, I'll just limit myself to the first poem for the moment (and because that's by far my favourite anyway - so far, at least). And, like Andrew, I think it works really well. ("Love divine, all loves excelling" came powerfully to mind as soon as I started reading). You seem to have the emphases spot on, and not artificially either. My only question would be in L3 - is the stress slightly off on "beyond"? A slightly churlish question, perhaps, given your success in the rest of the poem. Cheers David |
David, latecomers may still be the life of the party, and that bit I’ve missed may be crucial. Thanks for another vote against “beyond.” I don’t mind it, but if it jars you and Andrew and an editor friend of mine, there must be a problem. For now, I’ve taken the latter’s suggestion, though Andrew thinks that too sounds forced. If you have thoughts about the other two poems, no time will be too late.
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