I'm happy to be on that wavelength with you, Carl. I think we're on the right one.

Hi Jan,

I seem to remember this one from a while back, though perhaps you've changed it somewhat (or perhaps I'm hallucinating). Anyway, I really like it. The chaotic domestic scene brought a Dylan song to my mind too: "On The Road Again", the one with all this stuff going on:


Well, I wake up in the morning,
there's frogs in my socks
Your mama, she's hidin'
inside the icebox
Your daddy comes in, wearin'
a Napoleon Bonaparte mask

though the tone of your poem is much darker than Bob's playful surrealism.

I love the accumulation of details and the way the stanzas lengthen by one line each time, like a runaway train. With that in mind, I wonder if you need the full-stop before the last line of S2? Might it be better as

and her Dad’s dead drunk
and the drought goes on
and the trees are chasing the dog.

Mark

Yes, I had that one in mind too, although I couldn't quite place it. Definitely something on Bringing It All Back Home, though.

There's a kitchen in that one too.

Hi David, Carl and Mark,

My thanks.

David you have me pondering what the term could be lol

Any Dylan here is subliminal in the extreme.

Mark I probably did post this some time in the past. I was never happy with S3 I feel I am closer now. That end of S2 has been in the see-saw for quite a while.

I couldn't remember, so I searched for "Australian hooligan" - so larrikin? I'm not sure that's what I was thinking of. Is there an Aussie synonym for that?

Maybe it was larrikin.

Yes an Irish-Australian term said to men derived from the Irish pronunciation of ‘larking’