Hi, Jayne—

Thanks for the thoughtful and encouraging response. You have a talent for making me smile even when you point out things that need tweaking.

I took your advice on S2L1. Good catch on the time frame issue.

I decided to keep S2L4 because although at the time of the breakup he did not realize that it was the right thing, he came to understand this later.

I’m glad you like the ending.

Glenn

Hi Glenn,

I'm glad I'm a source of amusement to you! Haha.

I'm also glad that I helped a bit toward the revision.

This might make you smile too (after you've cringed a little!):

During Lockdown I tripped and fell, breaking my elbow off. Following surgery to re-attach it I had a hideous scar, and my husband suggested I had a tattoo of a zip to camouflage it. I quite liked the idea, as per your poem. After ten months of intense physical therapy (physiotherapy to the Brits) I got the full use of my arm back, and now the scar is only like a hairline. No tattoo. I hate them, but contrarily I'm a wee bit disappointed, to be honest. What a talking point that could have been. :D

Jayne