Eratosphere - Spectator -- the darker side of spring -- March 12 deadline

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Originally Posted by Jerome Betts (Post 314710)

I think Lines 8 and 12 are still a bit off
L8 Either original That with the years threadbare has grown
or two previous suggestions.
You don't need the single quotes round Ah, . . . recline!
Maybe start bracketed section with This instead of Which?
Adjustments for Lines 12 and 13?
With horsehair pads to please one's end
A softness sounding most aches' knell
I usually do points of suspension like this . . . rather than ... which might be taken as full stops in inadvertent triplicate. But I could be wrong.

Further thanks for your further thoughtful comments, Jerome! I've now produced a Revision#2 above, with those and some other changes.
Re points of suspension, I occasionally employ .. instead of ... (where I think I can get away with it).. and hope to start a trend. If adopted the change will save ink and keystrokes.

I admire your Seed Sickness (so to speak!)