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Clive Watkins 03-16-2006 10:17 AM

That's a fine commentary on a fine poem, Alicia. Thanks for posting it!

Kind regards...

Clive

peter richards 03-16-2006 11:49 AM

There really is something prestidigitational about the apologetic simile(s) phasing in and out of the text - you've left the trees behind by stanza 3 when all the fresh snow is a pristine maizeless field of innocence - and then you get branches and leaves on that as well. In the trance of poesised delirium these things bring about, the declarative and neatly prosaic statement, stanzas penultimate-ultimate, creates an empty field all of its own.

Thanks for showing...

A. E. Stallings 03-21-2006 05:03 AM

Thanks, Clive & Peter.

Before this topic slips away, I wanted to share another poem from the Art of the Lathe, to explore the power and resonance of titles. I'll share it first without its title and let it stand alone. (Folks who know the title can kind of sit back for a bit...) Just curious how the poem reads to people "as is":

I knew him. He ran the lathe next to mine.
Perfectionist, a madman, even on overtime
Saturday night. Hum of the crowd floating
from the ball park, shouts, slamming doors
from the bar down the street, he would lean
into the lathe and make a little song
with the honing cloth, rubbing the edges,
smiling like a man asleep, dreaming.
A short guy, but fearless. At Margie’s
he would take no lip, put the mechanic big
as a Buick through a stack of crates out back
and walked away with a broken thumb
but never said a word. Marge was a loud,
dirty girl with booze breath and bad manners.
He loved her. One night late I saw them in
the kitchen dancing something like a rhumba
to the radio, dishtowels wrapped around
their heads like swamis. Their laughter chimed
rich as brass rivets rolling down a tin roof.
But it was the work that kept him out of fights,
and I remember the red hair flaming
beneath the lamp, calipers measuring out
the last cut, his hands flicking iron burrs
like shooting stars through the shadows.
It was the iron, cut to a perfect fit, smooth
as bone china and gleaming under lamplight
that made him stand back, take out a smoke,
and sing. It was the dust that got him, his lungs
collapsed from breathing in a life of work.
Lying there, his hands are what I can’t forget.




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