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Mark, I think "habit" is OK. I took "Some" to refer to "odours", and fits the overall theme of smells. That way you can keep the solid rhyme "lives/survives".
Alan |
Quite right, Alan.
Thanks. |
well darlin here's 1 and 2 for you with some small jiggeling
And scented by the breaths of minute lives the aroma in air rooms remain inspired by an atmosphere of habit which survives o certain tracts of sky or ocean fired And natural some coloured by the weather similar to the nearby urban side some homey, humid, blended all together a jell of cares with fruit the fields provide. |
The Country Airs
Just as a sea that teems with tiny life gleams and smells like its inhabitants, this lively and provincial room is rife with scents of ceremony and innocence. The aroma is as natural as the weather, and brimming with its wayward energy, yet homey and humid, like jellies stored together, turned ageless in domestic custody. So lazy and punctual, like the tolling bell: so peaceful! the whiff of piousness and morning that makes these hanging linens ripple and swell, that its mortality is cause for mourning; much as this scene of prosy simplicity, for visitors, is cause for poetry. [This message has been edited by Mark Rizik (edited September 27, 2006).] |
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