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Erik Olson 08-18-2019 02:03 PM

Avatar Review
 
The new issue of Avatar Review is out. I am delighted and honored to have a poem in it, Abandoned, and, as it happens, fellow Spherian Terese Coe is there too with a fine poem, Partially Blind. (Click on titles for a direct link to the poem.) This is one that availed of being workshopped on the sphere some time ago. Thanks for your help,

Erik

Aaron Poochigian 08-18-2019 02:30 PM

Thanks for letting us know, Erik! I love your heroic couplets.

Martin Elster 08-18-2019 06:46 PM

Erik - I enjoyed “Abandoned” very much. I concur with Aaron about the heroic couplets and love the simile of the turtle and metaphor of the wire in the last line, the N’s compassion for the brood of quail, and the progression of the poem as a whole.

Best,
Martin

Erik Olson 08-18-2019 07:00 PM

Thanks, Aaron! That means loads to me coming from you.

Best

Sidenote: Mine is the only metrical poem in this, though there has been more in past issues.

Erik Olson 08-18-2019 07:11 PM

Martin, I appreciate your kind words. So glad it floated your boat. It is good to hear.

Best

Matt Q 08-22-2019 02:33 AM

I really like this Erik. Great couplets. Love the image of fixing the bending orchard limbs and what that seems to entail, the abandoned quail, the turtle simile and the bleak image at the close. He will go on, and the bleakness of his onward-going is shown in series of vivid images without being overstated. And the move to winter leaves open a hint of a possible of an eventual spring-time to follow. I think this is my favourite poem of yours -- of those that I've read at least.

best,

Matt

John Isbell 08-22-2019 03:34 AM

Hi Erik,

Very nice! I enjoyed this a good deal as well.

Cheers,
John

Andrew Frisardi 08-22-2019 09:50 AM

I enjoyed the heroic couplets too, Eric, and what a strong closing image! Nice work!

Erik Olson 08-22-2019 11:26 AM

Matt,

Many thanks indeed for the kind words! Glad that those elements worked for you, not least that the hint of spring in the winter imagery came through.

Cheers

Erik Olson 08-22-2019 11:35 AM

John,

Thank you. It is nice of you to say, and I am glad for it.

Best


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