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Mark McDonnell 03-21-2018 02:44 AM

Plugged in
 
Plugged in

My children roam the woods, I hear them say
'Oh father dear we really want to play
indoors, online, plugged in and out of sight.
This playing in the woods just isn't right.'
Some, said Blake, see nature all deformity.
Were he alive he'd tweet his nonconformity

Matt Q 03-21-2018 05:53 PM


Mark, I like the misdirecting enjambment on "play" and that the kids are ill at ease in the woods (finding it "not right"). Nice Blake joke at the end (OK, I had to Google to know it was a quote; I'm culturally deprived).

Nice theme. This fits it, I hope, since it's not just kids who are plugged in.


Self-portrait

I rage against the cuts, the desert war,
the corporations, climate change and more.

Watch me oppose the minions of despair:
I raise my voice. I know what’s right. I care.

I stand beside the homeless refugees,
expose corruption, bribery and sleaze.

Watch me speak out when others do not dare:
Here I am on Facebook clicking ‘share’.
.

Mark McDonnell 03-21-2018 06:08 PM

Oh that's good Matt!

Your poem has self-loathing satirical heft damn you haha. Mine's a muddle in comparison.

The kids are pretty good, really. They like the woods. But they got their first games console thing for Christmas after lots of persuasion that their lack of one was rendering them freaks in the eyes of their peers.


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