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The Oldie Competition
The Oldie Competition
by Tessa Castro IN COMPETITION NO 135 you were challenged to a round of bouts-rimés, with the rhymes taken from the first half of Longfellow's 'The Builders. It was not one of his best and most of you did bettet Longfellow ended his poem: Thus alone can we attain To those turrets, where the eye Sees the world as one vast plain, And one boundless reach of sky I fear some of Longfellow's vacuousness rubbed off via his choice of rhymes. 'Rhyme itself was something of a stumbling-block which many accommodated by pairing it with 'reason, as did J CM Hlepple in a short tale of compensation culture. For D A Prince no rhyme or reason entered the dim brain of Raphus cucullatus, the dodo, until it became a cliché for business consultants. Basil Ransome-Davies adopted the persona of a low-brow who loves 'to watch the Graham Norton Show', if only because 'what the Higher Vision sees / Brings doubt and worry Better left unseen.’ Commiserations to these and more, and congratulations to those printed below, each of whom wins £25, with the fireside bonus prize of a Taylor's of Harrogate tea and cake set going to Mary Hodges. Damn and damn again, it must be fate. I've lost my glasses for the umpteenth time. Without them I can’t see to find them. Great! I scrabble through my bag. There is no rhyme Or reason in my searching high and low. I tell myself I must not panic. What's the best Way out of this impasse? Dear Lord, please show Me what to do. I need a rest. Frustration makes me raise My voice in anger and my eyes are filled With futile tears. I dream of yesterdays When I was in control, and I could build A life of ordered calm, no trials like these To worry me. My head sinks down between My hands. Then ... what's that my eye sees? My spectacles lie smugly there—unseen. Mary Hodges I am a withered hand of fate. I am a barnacle of time. I am a scion of the great That speaks to you in rhyme. lam the lovechild of the low, The enemy of all that's best. I am a tawdry, tinsel show And I can never rest. My looks can kill, and I can raise Sad spirits of poor souls, all filled With longings for their yesterdays. I can unbuild and build. I am the messenger, and these, Satanic messages between The world that everybody sees And what remains unseen. John Whitworth Were I the master of my fate, I'd give myself an easy time. I've harboured hopes of being great, By writing memorable rhyme. I failed. My spirits were laid low. My critics always came out best. I put my precious verse on show, And yearned in public fame to rest I still aspire, and hope to raise My timid flag, albeit filled With disappointing yesterdays, Wishing my future verse will build An album better than all these. The poet lives betwixt, between The happy chap the public sees And the real me, unheard, unseen. MBallard It seems to both of them that somehow fate Has chosen this to be their special time. The seas are calm, the sailing weather great, Two lovers holding hands - the stuff of rhyme. A saxophone is playing, sweet and low, 'O Promise Me', a song that they love best. Before the ev'ning's done, they plan to show Their deepest love, before they move to rest. He turns to her. 'A toast to us I raise' (The waiter having seen their glasses filled); 'We bid adieu to all our yesterdays, And on our joint tomorrows let us build.' They treasure magic moments such as these, And vow that naught will ever come between. And that's when someone on Titanic sees The giant iceberg, hitherto unseen. Mae Scanlan |
John,
I always wonder whether to congratulate the winners (that's so often you, Bazza, Bill, George, Chris and Martin) on this thread or on the other Oldie one, with the new comp details on it, so I'll do both... Congratulations, John, and to Bazza for an HM. |
Congrats to Spherical winners!
We need to get Mae Scanlan here. Someone owes her a tea set for that. |
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