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*FANFARE!* Oldie 'Missed Appointment' - Chris wins!
I'm delighted to make another 'Fanfare' announcement (when 'one of us' bags a big win): Chris O'Carroll wins yet another distinguished prize! AND John Whitworth and Martin Elster get 'Honourable Menshes'.
Well done and congratulations, Chris, John and Martin. Eratosphere rules again! :D (See new thread for the next comp.) Jayne xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxThe Oldie Competition xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxby Tessa Castro IN COMPETITION NO 143 you were invited to write a poem called ‘Missed Appointment’. The response was large, and most of the entries were about love or death. John Whitworth redirected Death when he called to the wrong house. Michele Crawford, at her first attempt in the Oldie Competition, took Shakespeare’s missed appointments, ending with the couplet: ‘When Banquo missed his regal dinner date / His ghost turned up to show why he was “late”.’ Peter Davies, though, came up with the idea of missing his chance as the fourth Wise Man, and Martin Elster wrote accomplished verses on being at the wrong concert hall, or in the right one without the right instrument – the stuff of anxiety dreams, to be sure. Una McMorran took the inspired form of Noah’s raven, refusing to return and keeping to dry land till Elijah might come one day. Commiserations to all these, who deserved to win, and congratulations to those printed below, each of whom wins £25, with the well-appointed Yorkshire Tea gift set going to Judith Greenwood. Recycling bin’s due out. I’ve checked the date. But when I reach the corner where it’s stored, A sparkling web is stretched from bin to gate. A quiet spider guards his fragile hoard. Arthritic neighbour, wheezing, urges calm, Says ‘Hit it with that brush – I’ll just stand here.’ He moves ten feet away in his alarm And shields himself behind his bin in fear. I say, ‘Let’s leave my bin – it’s not full yet’ And help him put his bin out on the street. We chat, and watch the spider in his net. His home, his life, his universe complete. My neighbour starts to go, then turns to say, ‘We should be careful what we throw away.’ Judith Greenwood Under the clock, he’d said. Patient, she stood hearing an hour click by, wondering would he take her by surprise with flowers, or if she’d see him first, far off, feel her face flare with scarlet pleasure, shed her too-tight, stiff ache of anticipation and bright stare. Wondering how long, how soon. Under the clock, waiting alone, a prisoner in hope’s dock she watched time creep, shrank from the hurrying crowd, scrolling deep in her pocket some old ticket, its journey dead behind her; heard the loud roar of street traffic, wondering if she’d stick it longer. But how long? Holding up her head patient, she stood. Under the clock. He’d said. D A Prince Another satellite plunged from the sky, And tons of rubble didn’t hit my head. A drunken driver crashed as I walked by; Had I been where that tree stands, I’d be dead. A shadow on my X-ray looked like doom, But lab tests show it’s really nothing fatal. This date will not be carved upon my tomb; Some blessedly far in the future date’ll. While other shoppers bought that tainted meat And got done in by virulent bacteria, I find, so far, that every meal I eat Wreaks no catastrophe in my interior. There’s one appointment everybody keeps Eventually, so I am pleased to say That mine with that grim, bony bloke who reaps Is one that I have missed again today. Chris O’Carroll I must apologise. I did not mean to duck this vital meeting. I was all prepared, papers in order and the call button out of reach. I was dead keen, if you’ll excuse the phrase, to keep our date, marking the body’s last requests as done – last finger-lift, last heartbeat – then someone spotted me and screamed, ‘Resuscitate!’ So here I still am, schedule gone awry because some box-ticking prat hit the bell. Breathing one’s hoped-for last, it’s hard to tell people to bugger off – but I did try, honestly. I hope you’ll understand. What am I saying? Yes, of course you will. In fact, this small hiatus may fulfil your purpose precisely as you had planned. Alison Prince |
Congratulations to Chris, not just for winning, but doing so with a truly inspired poem. Chris, you outdid yourself, which is no easy task.
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What Bob said - a wonderful poem in its own right. Congrats, too, to John and Martin.
Frank |
Congrats, Chris. Your poem certainly is inspired. And congrats also to John. Way to go!
Martin |
Congrats to Chris and John and Martin. You met your appointment
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Congratulations to Chris and John and Martin, well done!
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