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The Oldie Bouts Rimés by 5th April
Here you go - we love the bouts rimés, don't we, and we're good at this sort of thing, so let's show them just how good we can be!
(I've won it twice, when 1st place got a bottle of single malt Scotch as the bonus) :) Jayne xxxxxxxxxxxxxxThe Oldie Competition no. 162 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxby Tessa Castro Time for the annual bouts rimés. Write a poem of 14 lines, please, with these words as the rhymes in the order given: plains, day, away, stains, pains, May, play, rains, leaves, suns, sheaves, breath, runs, death. Entries to ‘Competition 162’ by post (The Oldie, 65 Newman Street, London W1T 3EG), email (comps@theoldie.co.uk) or fax (020 7436 8804) by 5th April 2013. Don’t forget to include your postal address. |
I'm sure you'll all do better than this, even though Keats had it easier since no one told him what rhymes he had to use:
After dark vapors have oppress'd our plains For a long dreary season, comes a day Born of the gentle South, and clears away From the sick heavens all unseemly stains. The anxious month, relieved of its pains, Takes as a long-lost right the feel of May; The eyelids with the passing coolness play Like rose leaves with the drip of Summer rains. The calmest thoughts came round us; as of leaves Budding—fruit ripening in stillness—Autumn suns Smiling at eve upon the quiet sheaves— Sweet Sappho's cheek—a smiling infant's breath— The gradual sand that through an hour-glass runs— A woodland rivulet—a Poet's death. |
Roger,
Not only is it harder to do with all the rhymes stipulated, but I'd guess that you've done it faster than Keats would have. 14 lines in an elapsed time of well under two hours. Impressive! |
Douglas, Roger was implying that the poem he posted is by Keats.
Susan |
Well, That does put a different light on it. Still, one has to know his Keats pretty well in order to pick out the right poem from a batch of rhymes.
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A Life Well-Lived; James Earl Carter
A Life Well-Lived; James Earl Carter
This sturdy Georgia farm boy, born in Plains Had worked his father’s peanut fields each day, Until at age eighteen he went away To learn to sail; then got saltwater stains For seven years, until relieved of pains To rove the world. Returning home in May, And growing skilled at politics, he'd play The power game like sunshine follows rains. He reached the Apex, then like autumn’s leaves, Fell back to Earth, and felt the cooling suns Of Fame. Then God said “Gather ye the sheaves To feed thy meekest brethren. Use thy breath And strength to shelter those whose lives had runs Of Fortune worse than thine; and challenge Death." I have one factual error in this. How much poetic license is allowed? |
Here's my first try...
Eleanor Graves, 14; Donner Pass, February 1847
I dreamt about it all across the plains: a kingdom-come, an everlasting day for idling weeks and weeks and years away, forgetting crowded wagons and the stains of trail dirt. Not that heaven'd lack for pains. It might get dreary: months of sunshine May. A girl could run clean out of ways to play, and even California sometimes rains. I still dream in this forest of no leaves, whose fetid pools reflect the chillsome suns of days as cruel as knowledge of the sheaves we shed as deadweight down below. My breath grows short. I long to float where the river runs and so live ever, not just swoon to death. |
LA GRANDE PEUR
As Tory toffs scan France’s vasty plains and dream of rescue, as on Dunkirk’s day, their shrivelled minds, like small ships, slip away, puffed on by sails bereft of bankers’ stains and crewed by uncomplaining churls, whose pains of poverty and loss they mock, while May plots to resile from Human Rights and play, like night and fog, with all on whom there rains, their reign’s harsh hand. This faux armada leaves our times for those, which needed no two suns to light its Empire’s day, whose sweated sheaves paid for such prideful rule with slavish breath. Unlike two Churchills, in toff blood there runs fear of free Europe and their Party’s death. I doubt if this will chime withThe Oldie's prejudices - though two Churchills might just give them pause! |
The Dong Sonnet
The Dong, across the great Gromboolian plains, Follows his nose for ever and a day. Born to an endless grief, he lopes away Towards a golden west whose sunset stains The sky, fashioning songs to ease the pains Of hopeless Love, to make October May. One song to sad guitar he likes to play, A plaintive ditty, redolent of rains And long Autumnal melancholy, leaves Him weeping, weeping, for the happy suns He knew when innocence bound up the sheaves Now dried and withered by the bitter breath Of knowing better. Mark him as he runs His race, forever westering to Death. |
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