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Unread 04-03-2009, 09:36 AM
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Like many, I think that the problems here start with "telegraph," not only with the choice of that word but also because it puts the action of memory not on the narrator but on the crater itself. "Carafe," to me, is a wonderful choice. I agree with Nemo that the personal revelations should be delayed, to allow the landscape to speak for itself.
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