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Unread 04-03-2009, 05:11 PM
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This is my favorite so far. Except when I read "a girl in France," I had the same sinking feeling as some others here. I definitely do not like Kate's suggestion - surely there are four better syllables? The "chance" rhyme is a tricky one, but come on: dance, circumstance, glance.... maybe do something as OTT as "played, delayed or swept away."

that ball I dropped, that sad last dance in France...

My favorite lines:

to reach the seconds of a second chance
at something played, delayed or swept away:
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