Love the rhymes, and the noir dream of the second stanza -- who wouldn't like to dream they were in that canyon in Malibu? And the whole idea that the second stanza is a dream about where the poet/narrator wrote the first ...
But ... I'm not impacted by the story or the characters at all, and the whole noir thing ... ends up somewhere in between true noir and something more mock-noir like Dylan's "Black Diamond Bay". And, despite the truly clever device of the second stanza dreaming the writing of the first -- the two really don't seem to have any substantive connection.
In other words, as far as the actual poem goes -- I don't get it.
Maybe the story's just lost in a fog of escapism...
Last edited by Wendy Sloan; 04-04-2009 at 09:30 AM.
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