I’ve come to clear our stump, and see that shoots
Have made a thin and ill-considered stand
In the lines above, I would have liked a description of the shoots. It would have been better to show the reader how they’re emerging rather than sum it up with the abstract words, “have made a thin and ill-considered stand”. Overall, this sonnet only “suggests” images; it paints vague pictures in broad strokes. Poetry is always more interesting when specific images are given.
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