I like the attitude of this poet but I don't think the poem is a success yet. It has irritants as well as freedoms. " gutted it/Annette had split" is into showing off territory and adds nothing for me.
The"Lexus/Texas" rhyme made me smile. Now let's think...whose rhymes make me smile? Ah yes.
"Inanition" is surely too exhausted and flabby to be "chiseled"?
It's an incredibly cheeky poem and I think I know the perpetrator ;-)
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