I love the first two lines here, the metrical energy and vigor of the language. Thereafter I like the way it swings, but sort of lose track of the story--it's just tough to cram an I, a you, a he, a she, a we, and an Annette into 14 lines. It doesn't say too much though, and gets some points for that. Strange, neat poem.
Chris
PS.: While we're airing pet peeves, I dislike it when others are scolded for saying, I bet I know who wrote this. Part of the fun of bakeoffs always used to be the guessing, though now apparently we're not even allowed to do that. True, a responder who actually *does* know (as I know a few of these) can ruin the fun; but I don't see why we shouldn't be able to say our guesses in the body of our response.
Last edited by Chris Childers; 04-05-2009 at 08:59 AM.
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