This is well-written, and the symbolism is consistent and well-used, but it didn't grab me. I suppose it simply isn't my cup of sonnet tea. "Kruggerand" struck me as more a solution to the poet's problems than N's organic word choice. Also the first two lines of the sestet didn't seem necessary to me, which is a big problem in a sonnet like this. Much is weakened when the "Father’s clarion command" is diluted.
David R.
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