I neglected to comment on this one. It is so quietly accomplished that the accomplishment is easy to overlook (the great enjambment 6/7, for instance, or the aporia of the turn). The syntax flows effortlessly over the form. That said, it reads so smoothly that one expects it to be part of a series, perhaps, rather than a stand-alone piece, and one might like more rimes on di- or multi-syllabic words, such as "adheres" (which rimes, interestingly, with "here"). Indeed, the rime scheme is a sneaky one, and not as cookie-cutter as you might expect for such a piece, another aspect of its quiet accomplishment. Enjoyed.
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