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Unread 08-04-2009, 05:13 PM
Gregory Dowling Gregory Dowling is offline
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This is a lot of fun and works very well. The long lines are handled beautifully.

I agree with Roger that maintaining the full sense of the closing "moral" is probably not all important, but it would be good to keep something of the play between plural and singular, and "don't lose your heads" doesn't quite do that. But then the "read's / heads" rhyme is fun.
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