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Unread 09-04-2009, 01:31 PM
Orwn Acra Orwn Acra is offline
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I like this one a lot; it's quite clever and congratulations for fitting "gastroenterologist" in with the meter. I'd like to see the title changed; a title that faintly touches on the subject matter (because I love when titles do that!) because it's the kind of poem that could benefit from it, something like "How to Play Your Eternal Organs Overnight" or "the Last of the Microbe Hunters" or "Escape Pod from the World of Medical Observations" but not those specifically because I just stole them from Stereolab.

Yeah! It's a good poem.
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