Apologies to the poet, but this is so bad that's it's almost funny. The meter is a disaster. The strange enjambments, the poor sense of line and poor pacing destroy the anapestic flow and instead create a halting, stuttering one.
I don't mind the Spanish phrases, though of course it makes me wish I knew Spanish. The story doesn't charm me, unfortunately, so there isn't much to make up for the technical problems.
I have absolutely no idea who wrote this, but I'm sure they're capable of better.
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