Another poem that skates over the surface of a better poem that was never realized. It could have gone one step further to make the language more interesting and create more specific images. One example is the sister in "fantasyland" -- that's such a broad term that it hardly bites. Another example is: "punishments one can foresee" -- maybe the poet can (fore)see the punishments but I can't. In general the poem is in broad strokes until the ending when the sausages pop up. Oh, and I loved the "husbands" in plural -- yup, this bigamist is going to have problems going homes again.
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