This has a really good voice. The first stanza didn't do a lot for me, but when I hit the second I sat right up, thinking this is a poem that's going to take fun leaps. I like that stanza, the snappy way it runs, and of course the words echo the old folksong, which is nice. What happened after that were two rather dull lines that compose the third stanza. And the rest, well, it never did take the fun leaps I was hoping for. I did like this bit, even though I have no idea what it is or what the story behind it is: ...blew his monthly paycheck on a Nudie Cohen outfit made of sequins and white spandex. The worst thing in the poem was bringing in Clinton, because it's such old hat and we all know the story ten times over. The Nader joke was kind of fun though. One more thing: I'm not a rhymer and end-rhymes don't turn me on like they do others, BUT I did notice the virus/Osiris rhyme and thought it was great, and that's saying a lot because normally I don't even pronounce it O-sigh-ris but rather O-seer-is. It worked anyway and was cool.
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