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Unread 01-05-2010, 03:22 PM
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A part of me is impressed by the barrage of words, the never-ending descriptions, the meticulous details, etc.; after all, it's obvious that a lot of thought and care went into the writing. But as soon as I came to the last stanza, I couldn't help thinking how much more effective and striking it would have been if the poem consisted only of that stanza, with some slight adjustments to make it clear that it's a doctor looking at the girl. So, a part of me wishes for a much shorter poem.
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