John, "unfazed and resolutely undepressed" seems totally denied by the battering at the brain on. Or is the opening line just good old British understatement, a stiff upper lip? If so, it would be more effective as irony, I think, if the bulldog countenance is held longer and the tremble introduced further in. Difficult given the rhyme restraint, but it would be more telling in my view.
Best,
Peter
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