Hermetic references
An item that I rather liked was the one on size reversal :
The despair
of loving may lead to long plane rides with
little leg room, may lead to a penis full
of fish, a burning chicken, a room filled
with a single, pink rose. Funny, how
we think of it as a giant rose,
not a tiny room.
Apart from the prosy wording that leads to 'leg room', I like the salmon and the final size reversal that resumes with a different use of the word 'room'. That rose v. room part is to me the best, and here I depart from the compiler's scorn.
What stretches my galluses is the 'burning chicken'. Unless it's a code blue cornball sexual allusion, it's a private call to an event of no enormous relevance that's known to one or at most a few readers. BORING.
You choose : a flaming catamite or a bad meal while attention was being paid elsewhere to maybe a rose? Either way, it fails to gruntle.
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