Marion,
Your poem is definitely a winner.
But in these lines
while tossing on those restless seas,
you might create a masterpiece
I don't hear "seas/masterpiece" rhyming. The first ends with "eez" and the second with "ees." It would be like trying to rhyme "spouses" with "houses." They don't.
Martin
Last edited by Martin Elster; 03-02-2010 at 08:44 PM.
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