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Unread 03-03-2010, 12:33 PM
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Originally Posted by Martin Elster View Post
Marion,

Your poem is definitely a winner.

But in these lines

while tossing on those restless seas,
you might create a masterpiece

I don't hear "seas/masterpiece" rhyming. The first ends with "eez" and the second with "ees." It would be like trying to rhyme "spouses" with "houses." They don't.

Martin


Martin,
You don't know how I struggled to come up with the "seas/masterpiece" rhyme!! I'm going to go with John's assessment and hope Lucy agrees.

Jerome,
Aren't kippers a kind of fish?
Must confess total ignorance on 'kip' or 'to kip'.

Jayne,

How about a song that goes:

"You say zee,
and I say zed..."
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