The poem reads as well, if not better, without S1.
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His eye, so good at unseen faults in others
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this moment that’s reflected from within.
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are so good one wishes an improvement on
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and at his own, picks out in her its kin,
then sets it so no flame or aqua smothers
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that connects them.
The last two lines are a good conclusion for this sonnet.
The only wish is to replace "see" with something less direct, like "guess."