Bob, I like it too, except that for a quintessentially English flavour like this you can't say 'nightstand' and 'faucet' - it's 'bedside table' and 'tap'.
On account of the 'making every word count' thing - you don't need ...and turned on the faucet. If you stagger into the shower it's implicit that you'll turn it on!
Sorry to sound picky but your entries are so good that it would be a pity if a couple of little flaws spoilt your chances.
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