Michael, it took me a minute to figure out where you would put "that". If the line needed fleshing out, I would agree, but it doesn't, and the ellipsis doesn't strike me as unnatural. He seems to be sticking to a close syllable count.
Alan, I don't see why you think the ending is lame. It's a concise and witty poem, not meant to be particularly profound (though I do find some depth in it), and the ending strikes me as suitable. I love its irreverence and its perfection. I don't see any mawkishness in it.
I just looked up The Lullaby and that is a very complex poem -- I'll have to read it a few more times before I comment, but it strikes me as being a very different kind of poem from this one. "Two Songs" isn't in the book I have (selected poems in their original form, before he changed them).
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