John,
I would forgive you absolutely anything, my friend!
Martin,
I like the revision; it's much better with fewer 'and's.
Jean,
I'm glad you're now on board with LitRev. John's 1,2 &3 sums it all up nicely.
Roderic,
Glad you're on board, too! I agree with Ann; your poem can be 'notched up' a bit, and it also needs some punctuation in line 7 and the last line, though those may change if you're going to tweak it. But you're way ahead of me - haven't even got a glimmer of an idea for this one yet
