Yep, much better without the stiff joints and the 'hanker-chiff', John.
One further suggestion about the in-laws:
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They drink the booze and THEN they quarrel.
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How about
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At Christmas time the in-laws come.
They drink me out of gin and rum,
Then quarrel with my dad and mum.
It doesn't matter greatly that there's a 'To' in the same place in S3, but I think the repetition in the first line is sufficient and the other lines need to be a little different from one another.