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Originally Posted by Maryann Corbett
What would we say about it on a modern po-board?
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Wow, Maryann! What a find! Brilliant. I didn't know the poem either. But I freely admit I should have.
Would it get slammed here? Yes, on at least three counts. First, I'd curse him for his use of 'that.' At the start of S2, it's in nearly every line. Useless!
Second, he'd get trashed for his adjective-noun pairs. Badly. There are a ton: "pale estates" "fortuned bone" "ravaged roots." And that's just the first few lines.
Then there's the "the X of Y" fault, so often lately cursed. "The flask of blood," "The hint of death." Someone would tell him it's not worthy of the deep end!
But the real kicker, and the most delicious irony of all, comes in the last stanza, and from last night:
"Through periscopes rightsighted from the grave;"
Were I a better, more knowledgeable scholar, I would have cited this poem. You did, and you did it gracefully, and for that, you have my admiration. I bow to you.
Thanks,
Bill