When the Muse calls it's always hard going for beginners, but if Mr. Thomas wishes to be taken seriously as a poet, he'll have to serve more cake with a lot less icing, and take care to ensure it isn't so stale next time. He might find the recent thread about contemporary tastes to be informative. Perhaps he would benefit from participating in a forum where the standards aren't as high, but at the very least he should steer clear of the Deep End. There be monsters. That said, I do see a glimmer of talent here -- perhaps working within the restraints of a repeating form, like the villanelle, would toughen him up.
I hope this is helpful. Don't give up!
Ed
Last edited by Ed Shacklee; 01-11-2011 at 01:48 PM.
Reason: added monsters
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