I believe the author may have had the guests’ children in mind when s/he wrote about the scuffling on the floor. This confusion might be addressed by removing the word “Their” in L10, or by changing the line to “Their children’s children scuffle on the floor”, or by replacing “scuffle on the floor” with something like “shuffle out the door”.
My main nit is with using “away” in lines 9 & 11. My minor nit is the capitalization of each line.
The repeated lines 2 and 13 is an excellent device and the overall effect of the sonnet is one of a gentle yet poignant portrayal of someone, I’m sure, we all know -- the Betty Thompsons in our lives.
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