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Unread 04-16-2011, 08:45 AM
Jean L. Kreiling Jean L. Kreiling is offline
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I remember this one fondly.

I do wish there weren't an extra syllable in the last line, and I'm not sure about the white space before L10--it creates a bit of a sledge-hammer effect, when the words alone make their point with brilliant force.

I just love these keen observations: the way men run from love and then mourn its fleeing, the fact that some men find "comfort" in being "stone," and that picture of them hiding behind furniture when a real wind blows in.

Well-crafted and fun!

Best,
Jean
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